Original Poem Composition (Traditional Tanka)

Tanka:

Traditional Tanka:      

          Problems                                                      
Sun rises and sets,
Like Happiness and Sorrow.
Problems are dark nights,
Hoping to see a bright light,
Shining through my entire life.


Draft:
        Problems
Sun rises and sets,
Like Happiness and Problems (Sorrow).
Problems are dark sides (nights),
Hoping to see a bright path light,
Shining through my whole (entire) life.

 Traditional Tanka:

          Challenges  

Dark as it may seem,

But true beauty lies inside.

Jump, Run and Explore,
Though you may stumble and fall.
Triumph is what you're made for.

Draft:

Challenges

Dark as we (it) just thought (may seem).

But true beauty lies out there (inside).

Jump, Run and Explore,

Though you may stumble and fall.

Success (Triumph) is what you're made for.